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children of dune - leto 1
seperis
Fraser on safe sex:
Fraser's stretched out on his stomach on the floor inches away from Dief, both of them staring at each other with a weird intensity.

"Didn't you do your dominance thing last night?" Ray asks, wanting coffee before trying to work out what this is. Much less--much less anything else. The back of his neck feels hot, and he can't help touching it, like Fraser left a mark there he could feel.

"We're having an argument," Fraser says tranquilly, chin on folded hands. "Regarding the consequences of foolish actions."

Dief snorts. Fraser rolls his eyes. "That won't be a problem for us," he answers firmly as Ray gets coffee and takes a drink. "I can't get Ray pregnant."

Ray swallows fast, leaning over the sink until he can breathe again.

"Or become pregnant," Fraser adds, to be complete about it.


I can't even tell where I was going with that. *facepalm* See, all it was? This thing with like, an axe and some--I don't even know. But it's almost twenty thousand words, it still doesn't have an ending, and I can't even prove it has a plot. I think there's snow and Frobisher. Yeah. No, not like that.

So basically, this is the only part of it I like. Likely, it's the only part anyone will ever see.


Ahahahahahaha!

Oh, BOYS. You make me realize that I miss Fraser and Ray; it's been so long since my headlong plummet into dS fandom that I forget how much I love them, sometimes.

They make me happy. *purrs*

basingstoke and I had this whole theory about Dief being the dominant wolf because he's the only one getting laid on a regular basis.

This theory can lead you down some strange paths if you are not careful. Some of the paths involve undignified leg humping.

I believe it. Pretty much the only one on the entire show who ever seems to get any.

see??this is why my mind is a dark, dark place one should not enter-at any cost*points at herself* cause, after reading this, I immediately thought you were writing mpreg...and I don't even read that...and yet, that's where my mind is headed, apparently..so, so wrong*headdesk* um--I hope you'll find where you're going with this...it can't be worse than what I imagined*facepalms*

A wise man once said, "That's why I don't *have* a wolf!"

*sad* I bet that was not in the curriculum for Fraser's education. Damn them.

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Kowalski. And--no idea about the rest. it's very *confusing*.

[delurks briefly]

Likely, it's the only part anyone will ever see.

But, but, but...! *lip wibble* But twenty thousand words! And snow, and Frobisher, and staring contests! And Fraser and Ray and Dief!

[sniffs longingly from the corner and returns to lurkdom]

I know! Twenty thousand words! And it's like, every time I go to finish, I add five thousand. It's strange. It's almost curtainfic, except too long and involving hunting rabbits.

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There is, in fact, a bear peripherally involved. Like, mentioned. Somewhere. I think.

I know!! This is a crossover with SGA! Fraser touched some Ancient doo-hickey and during the resulting chaos had sex with RayK in a closet. Deif is the only one who knows what the doo-hickey does and is just trying to prepare the boys for parenthood in nine months.

...I have just almost spit out coffee. That is so awesome.

I'm fairly certain that it is - or should be - one of Fraser's goals in life to get Ray to spit out his coffee at least once a day. I'm also fairly certain that there's going to be hell to pay once Ray cottons onto this. Payback is a bitch.

*thoughtful* It should be. He should keep a scorecard for it, too.

This thing with like, an axe and some--I don't even know. But it's almost twenty thousand words, it still doesn't have an ending, and I can't even prove it has a plot.

Ah... You've been building characters. So long as the characterization doesn't become unbelievably repetitious or tedious, the emotional (winding, nonsensical) journey IS the plot. Life does not fall into neat little symmetrical piles; there's no rule saying the lives written about in fic have to, either.

However, if it just winds and winds and goes round and round with saying anything, then, it was the journey you needed to take, even if you didn't find the destination. It's not a waste. But, if you're frustrated, I'd step away for a while, then come back and viciously cut out any extraneous bits that don't convey (or at least symbolize) conflict, emotion, or intention.

I don't care where the plot goes in this, frankly. I'm not even part of that fandom; never saw an entire episode. Can't stand the looks of either actor, for no logical reason I could possibly give. And yet... now, I'm curious to see the show.

This understanding between them (and the other womandog--this acknowledgment of what's not being said and the careful avoidance of weighty desires with a pretended calm and good humor... This perfect and seamless blend of two levels, here: "The back of his neck feels hot, and he can't help touching it, like Fraser left a mark there he could feel.

"We're having an argument," Fraser says tranquilly, chin on folded hands. "Regarding the consequences of foolish actions."
If any of your twenty thousand words resemble these? I want to keep reading.

I'm more worried because without a plot, it's too easy for me to just go on like this for a while without a clear idea where I'm going. Sometimes, it works out surprisingly well. And sometimes--well. It ends up an overwrite, if that makes sense. It's a lot of fun as a writer, but for a reader, I suspect it gets very annoying fast.

On the part you quoted: it's cool, I mean to me, that you pointed out that part. It's part of an ongoing conversation, sort of, between all three of them. I'm going back through the fic to check they work outside of context as well as in context and link up at least a little, with mixed success. It's honestly weird to work with a character that canonically only one other character can hear. Kind of the opposite of having a chorus.

I love it! This is a great snippet -- I do hope you decide to post the rest.

Hugs,

Ace

I adore this. It's juuuuuuuuuuust right. /goldilocks

*quietly hoping for more*

Dief just loves yanking Fraser's leash, doesn't he? :)

I am beginning to believe all shows need a half-deaf wolf that only one person can hear. It would add immeasurably.

Likely, it's the only part anyone will ever see.

It's an awesome part, though!

::bounces::
but, YAY, because: Dief!!

too many people forget about Dief, or send him off to stay with Maggie or Frannie or somebody, yet in canon he's an important part of Fraser's life....